"Hey, it's mine!" Richie called as he swung his zapper at a beetle.
"Another miss!" I laughed as I once again hit the beetle in the hotspot, causing it to recoil into itself. "Yeah!" I called. "Booya!" as it popped into the familiar glowing mist and adding to my total, which will, in time, give me one of the best bounty hunts in the region. Jonny Gax, aliases Pyro, The Arsenist, Blaze, and almost any other flame related thing that could possibly be used as a name, will be turned in, alive, and give my family name honor. Richie scowled, guessing my thoughts, and gave me a little pop with his zapper. I cursed under my breath, then went to the showcaser to take my next test. "Renegade! Real... Good luck. He's angry."
About Me
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- Mark
- I like to skateboard and experiment with stuff on the computer. I don't have a ton of friends, but the ones I have are really close. Also, I like to write and am in the middle of drawing and writing a comic series as well as writing two books(Bounty Hunter and Warriors) that you can find under my blog list.
5 comments:
May I make a suggestion? Make your chapters longer and use more sensory details. Like sight, smell, hearing, taste, touch, and feeling (like emotions)
Point taken, but dude, I'm only eleven...
That was intence, but I agree with Seth...
Your only eleven...WOW! I thought you were at least twelve.
Are you in the sixth grade?
-make a note of it
Angel Wings
awesome...first try? I am anxious to hear more........
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